User blog comment:Ausllyshipper143/My new Auslly fan fiction!!!!!/@comment-5266452-20120806002708/@comment-24.127.19.152-20130210032738

It's a good basic start. Needs way more detail in between the lines though. Look into 'point of view' style writing instead if script style. Trust me, the ones I've written with POV were WAY better than the ones without it. *rushed*