Thread:Red Compassion, Red Love, Red Hate/@comment-6015882-20141005171914/@comment-5384369-20141016104209

It's really good, but like I said, jut fix up your tenses. I'm not sure if you know what tenses are. It's like past and present, not censorship.

Also, just a few parts are confusing, like the nickname section. If she originally didn't go by the name Trinity, have her b called "Alice" and then start calling her Trinity (or vice versa) For example:

Fabina Lover21911 wrote: Okay, I'll show you the full version. But it's going to be a little T-rated. And please don't get mad at me:

''Days turned into weeks. Weeks turned into months. All of them have one thing in common: a period that Trinity calls it the "Age of Darkness." A ridiculous name but it's what she thought of it. She called it that because she thought everything is now a nightmare ever since the divorce of her parents that had been finalized in July, and Trinity lived with her mom as a result of that. Even after it, her parents' fighting was going from livid to tumultuous, and it had been super rough for her. The arguments were brutal and so angry it made Trinity extremely uncomfortable and stressful, and had a few sleepless nights. And to make matters worse, she was now a subject for a certain legal case. A custody case, that is. For about seven times. The custody drama and arguing was so overwhelming and it took a toll on her that was so bad she had experienced insomnia, severe depression, anxiety attacks, angry outbursts, vicious headaches, and thoughts about making an attempt at taking her own life.''

''On the brink of eighth custody battle, Trinity stays over at Edith's house for tranquility. Hanging out with Edith, Braylor, and her two children always made her happy and it soothed her. Since Edith was a retired yet skilled psychiatrist for both children (especially adolescents and teenagers) and adults, she knew what Trinity's exactly goes through. She said that some C.O.Ds (children of divorce, respectively) who are so close to their parents that they can get attached to the idea of them being together, and that's something they hoped it would last forever. If that dream would shatter, then they feel broken themselves. It could be caused by guilt because of some of them thought it was their fault even though it wouldn't be really their fault. But it mostly causes depression and anger, so divorce not only makes them feel doleful, it made them slightly aloof but extremely resentful to any future stepparent. Trinity listened to it and thought about it for a minute, taking it all in. She then excuses herself to the bathroom and then, after what seemed like minutes, Edith finds Trinity in a small white dress, trying to jump out of a window. Just in time, Edith was fortunate enough to coax her not to and she listened but when they got into Edith's bedroom, Trinity suddenly broke down in tears and told everything about her depression and the reason of her parents' divorce.''

The day of the custody battle, Edith and her husband stuck by Trinity's side. During the battle, Trinity then dropped a bombshell by asking to live with Edith. After claiming that the mental environment she used to embrace is now unstable since her parents' divorced, even though it was an unorthodox confession, the judge allows it, thinking it would be best for her because an unhappy and mentally unstable child is a recipe for disaster. So, Trinity becomes officially Edith and Braylor's adopted child. Michelle and Robert were initially shocked by their daughter's decision but came to terms with it and decided to become cordial for Trinity's sake. At the time of the custody battle, she was only 7 years old.

A week after the custody battle, Trinity settles her new life living with her mother's friend and it turned out well for her. She was finally living the comfortable family life she wanted to live in because it made her happy and she liked that. Despite the trauma she had been through, she is still happy about this. Living in the Green family household was possibly the best decision she had ever made, although she misses her parents. But she knew she needed somewhere suitable to not only to live in but for her mind to settle in happily. So choosing to live with Edith and her family was the only thing she could think of because they have a very suitable environment that keeps Trinity's mental health in line and under control. She also earned the nickname "Trinity" because while she is the third child in general, she is the first adopted child in the Green family, so she started using it as her regular name while still referring herself as Alice.

a period that Trinity calls it the "Age of Darkness." Change this. Either change it to "called the..." of "calls the..."

''Trinity stays over at Edith's house for tranquility. Hanging out with Edith'' You switched over to present tense here wth the word "stays"