User blog comment:Mrs.NiallHoran13/Love Has Always been here Chapter 2/@comment-4717855-20121029231426

You could space it out better, like for dialogue, you're supposed to space it out for a conversation like this:

"I like pie," said Number 1.

"Good for you!" said Number 2.

Spaced like that. The rest of it was good though, and I'm interested in reading Chapter 3! :)