User blog comment:Aleeha.Alavi/You! : Second Chapter/@comment-24392123-20140730122643

Awh, I am really intruiged by the plot of this story! And it is quite different as well, which is always a good thing. :D

Just a little hint, I found it a little hard to read because it was all bundled together. So if you were able to add more spaces and paragraphs and whatnot, it would make it a lot easier to read. :)

Other than that, good job! :D